WP3 Final

Author's Statement:

This writing project was possibly the most difficult for me to get started on just because it is so different from anything I have ever done before. A letter to a sculpture? An inanimate object that cannot understand anything I'm writing to it? It was hard for me to grasp this concept, but once I did, I think I was able to produce a well-written letter that covered all the points of the assignment.

I did less revision between my first and final drafts for this project because the peer reviewing we did was much different. I received a lot of good feed back from my peers, but we only did one in-class revision. In addition, we did not receive suggestions from our instructor, which I had found helpful in the past. As a result of this, I had to come up with more of the revisions on my own, and I also asked another peer for suggestions on my letter.

I didn't do much extensive or drastic reworking of my first draft, but I did work in some additional information. I included a bit about the creator of my sculpture, Rueben Nakian, and I used this to further juxtapose the sculpture "Birth of Venus" with the classical art it was based off of. Also, I expanded on the fact that you can see the pipes that hold the sculpture together. This adds to the argument that my sculpture is not the mystical goddess that Venus was--it is evident what the sculpture is made of and how it stays together. There is no mystery in that. I tried to make it clear in my final draft that the mystery of "Birth of Venus" lies in figuring out who she is rather than what she is. It is obvious that what she is is a bronze sculpture. Who she is is a bit more difficult to figure out because it is not immediately apparent just from looking at the sculpture.

I made the argument that people are attracted to "Birth of Venus" because she is made to represent us as people. People aren't perfect like goddesses; people are flawed like the sculpture. I think this is an important point to realize because it helps us to see beauty in things that are imperfect.

Overall, I ended up liking this project a lot. Honestly, I thought it was ridiculous at first, but I enjoyed the more creative writing as opposed to the more formal rhetorical analyses we had previously done in this class. It was definitely a unique project and had unique challenges. For example, I wasn't sure exactly what I was supposed to write about in a letter to a sculpture, but once I had an idea, it was fairly easy to write a good letter. Reading it out loud to the sculpture (and my class) as well as imitating the sculpture will be another challenge to overcome, but I got to practice during the peer review and it shouldn't be too bad.

First Draft

Statement of Purpose

Final Draft:

Dear Birth of Venus,

Do you know where you got your name? “Birth of Venus” is not unique. It is not original. It is the name of a painting done in the 1400s by Sandro Botticelli. Your name is a direct reference to this painting. This painting shows the goddess Venus, rising up out of the water, surrounded by angels. Venus, the Roman goddess of love and beauty, is shown as a beautiful woman in this painting and countless other classical works of art depicting her. Ancient sculptures like “Venus de Melo” and “Venus de Medici” show a grown woman, perfect in form and features. Beautiful. Flawless. This is the Venus people know. This is what people expect when the name “Venus” comes to mind. A goddess. Perfection. Your name demands that you be beautiful.

But Birth of Venus, you are not beautiful. You are not flawless. You are not perfect. You are the farthest thing from the image of a goddess. You are grotesque. Flawed. Imperfect. Some might even go so far as to call you ugly. You are average in every way imaginable. You are probably even below average. At first glance, there is absolutely nothing special about you. You are not a magnificent piece of classical art; you were created in the 1960s by Rueben Nakian, who though talented, is not on the same level as the ancient artists who created your namesakes. How can you be the complete polar opposite of these works? Why were you named after something that you have nothing in common with?

You were named after that Venus because you are so different. Your name draws attention to the juxtaposition between the idealistic beauty of the gods and the realistic normalcy of everyday life, and these differences are important. By naming you after the painting, it not only demands that you be beautiful, it demands that you be compared to it. People hear your name and compare you to this goddess, this epitome of beauty and perfection. They hold you to her, and note the stark differences between the two.

And how can you even compare to her? You don’t even look human. Honestly, it’s really hard to tell what you do look like. You are so complex, so…different. You are a complicated mass of bronze pieces welded together. You’re hard to figure out, but it’s easy to see what you are. Whereas Venus was something mystical, it is obvious what you’re physically made of. A scaffold of metal pipes is all that holds you up and keeps you in tact, and the pipes are completely visible to anyone looking at you, connecting all your individual pieces like some crude skeleton. Each piece is completely unique—different size, shape, and texture, even different colors where the bronze has turned a greenish hue. Each fold and curve in the metal creates different shadows that fall on different places, and even that is different depending on the time of day.

One of the pieces is higher than the rest of you, like it’s rising up out of the wreckage that makes up your body. This is what people’s eyes are drawn to when first looking at you. This is what we notice. Why is this piece of you so important? Is this your face? Are you looking back at us? This is nothing like the smooth pale face of the Venus in the painting, with her golden hair falling behind her. This is different.

Further setting you apart from the Venus that you were named for is that you are very real. We can see and touch and feel you. We can walk around you and observe you in all your dimensions. An ancient myth, an old painting—these things aren’t real for us. We know about them, we can look at pictures of them, but they are not here right in front of us like you are. And because you are here right in front of us, we are able to really get to know you. We can look all around you, and each time we look at you, we see something different. Certain parts of you are visible only from certain angles, and other parts of you look different as the onlooker stands in a different spot. You have more to you than what initially meets the eye. You have depth. It’s impossible for someone to stand in one spot and think that they really understand you. Your mystery isn’t in what you are—it is in who you are.

This is why you are appealing to people. People can relate to you. You’re a better example for us than some fictional ancient goddess. You are like us. People aren’t flat and one-dimensional. People aren’t transparent and easy to understand. People aren’t always who or what they appear to be. People take time to get to know and to figure out. We all have spots and imperfections. We as people are complicated and unique and difficult, just like you are.

And this, Birth of Venus, is where your beauty becomes evident. See the goddess Venus was just that: a goddess. She was not human. She could be perfect. We on the other hand are not. Humans are inherently flawed; true perfection is impossible. You, Birth of Venus, you are human. You represent all of our flaws, mistakes, and imperfections. You are an example of something we can relate to, something we can strive for. You show us how we can be beautiful despite all our faults, because you are beautiful. You are an art object. People come look at you, admire you. We can see your obvious flaws—your asymmetry, your rough textures, and your abstract figure—but still appreciate you. We can look past these flaws and still find beauty inside you. Beauty is not defined as perfection, because really, nobody is perfect, and yet the world is full of beauty. You just have to know how to see it.

Sincerely,

Cara Anderson

WP3 Draft 1

Dear Birth of Venus,

Do you know where you got your name? “Birth of Venus” is not unique. It is not original. It is the name of a painting done in the 1400s by Sandro Botticelli. Your name is a direct reference to this painting. This painting shows the goddess Venus, rising up out of the water, surrounded by angels. Venus, the Roman goddess of love and beauty, is shown as a beautiful woman in this painting and countless other classical works of art depicting her. Ancient sculptures like “Venus de Melo” and “Venus de Medici" show a grown woman, perfect in form and features. Beautiful. Flawless. This is the Venus people know. This is what people expect when the name “Venus” comes to mind. A goddess. Perfection. Your name demands that you be beautiful.

But Birth of Venus, you are not beautiful. You are not flawless. You are not perfect. You are the farthest thing from the image of a goddess. You are grotesque. Flawed. Imperfect. Some might even go so far as to call you ugly. You are average in every way imaginable. You are probably even below average. At first glance, there is absolutely nothing special about you. How can you be the complete polar opposite of your namesake? Why were you named after something that you have nothing in common with?

You were named after that Venus because you are so different. Your name draws attention to the juxtaposition between the idealistic beauty of the gods and the realistic normalcy of everyday life, and these differences are important. By naming you after the painting, it not only demands that you be beautiful, it demands that you be compared to it. People hear your name and compare you to this goddess, this epitome of beauty and perfection. They hold you to her, and note the stark differences between the two.

And how can you even compare to her? You don’t even look human. Honestly, it’s really hard to tell what you do look like. You are so complex, so…different. You are a complicated mass of bronze pieces welded together. You’re hard to figure out. A scaffold of metal pipes is all that holds you up and keeps you in tact, and the pipes are completely visible to anyone looking at you, connecting all your individual pieces like some crude skeleton. Each piece is completely unique—different size, shape, and texture, even different colors where the bronze has turned a greenish hue. Each fold and curve in the metal creates different shadows that fall on different places, and even that is different depending on the time of day.

One of the pieces is higher than the rest of you, like it’s rising up out of the wreckage that makes up your body. This is what people’s eyes are drawn to when first looking at you. This is what we notice. Why is this piece of you so important? Is this your face? Are you looking back at us? This is nothing like the smooth pale face of the Venus in the painting, with her golden hair falling behind her. This is different.

Another important difference between you and the Venus that you were named for is that you are very real. We can see and touch and feel you. We can walk around you and observe you in all your dimensions. An ancient myth, an old painting—these things aren’t real for us. We know about them, we can look at pictures of them, but they are not here right in front of us like you are. And because you are here right in front of us, we are able to really get to know you. We can look all around you, and each time we look at you, we see something different. Certain parts of you are visible only from certain angles, and other parts of you look different as the onlooker stands in a different spot. You have more to you than what initially meets the eye. You have depth. It’s impossible for someone to stand in one spot and think that they really understand you.

This is why you are appealing to people. People can relate to you. You’re a better example for us than some fictional ancient goddess. You are like us. People aren’t flat and one-dimensional. People aren’t transparent and easy to understand. People aren’t always who or what they appear to be. People take time to get to know and to figure out. We as people are complicated and unique and difficult, just like you are.

And this, Birth of Venus, is where your beauty becomes evident. See the goddess Venus was just that: a goddess. She was not human. She could be perfect. We on the other hand are not. Humans are inherently flawed; true perfection is impossible. You, Birth of Venus, you are human. You represent all of our flaws, mistakes, and imperfections. You are an example of something we can relate to, something we can strive for. You show us how we can be beautiful despite all our faults, because you are beautiful. You are an art object. People come look at you, admire you. We can see your obvious flaws—your asymmetry, your rough textures, and your abstract figure—but still appreciate you. We can look past these flaws and still find beauty inside you. Beauty is not defined as perfection, because really, nobody is perfect, and yet the world is full of beauty. You just have to know how to see it.

Sincerely,

Cara Anderson

WP3 Statement of Purpose

For Writing Project 3, I will be writing a letter to Reuben Nakian's sculpture, "The Birth of Venus." As stated in the project guidelines, the letter will need to include observations, reflections and insights and how those relate to a specific aesthetic or concept. Another major part of my letter will be the historical and contextual background information about both the goddess and the painting that the sculpture references.

I will be presenting this letter in two different ways. First, I will be posting it online on my blog. This medium will allow me to include multimedia elements such as pictures, and I will also be able to include hyperlinks that will enable my audience to gain more outside information that doesn't directly pertain to my writing. This will be beneficial because it may help the audience better understand the letter.

Posting it online will also make my letter reach a broader audience. As with the first two writing projects for this class, my primary audience for Writing Project 3 will be my teacher. He is the primary audience because he is grading this assignment, and because I want to get a good grade, I will have to make sure that my letter is done correctly and follows the guidelines and also is a good piece of writing. Since all my classmates are doing similar assignments and our teacher will be reading all of them, I want to make my letter stand out from the others. Hopefully, this will make my letter unique and more interesting so it will be something my teacher will enjoy reading.

A secondary audience is my classmates. Our blogs are all linked together, so it will be really easy for current and future English 151 students in this class to reach. They might want to use mine as an example of the writing project, so again I need to make sure that my letter is done correctly and done well. Additionally, anybody with access to the Internet could potentially read my letter, especially someone looking for information on my specific sculpture. This will mean I have to present all my information accurately.

Besides posting it online, I will also be reading my letter out loud to the sculpture. My primary audience for this will be the sculpture. Sculptures are inanimate objects, specifically art objects, and therefore can't hear or understand what I'm reading to it, but I'm going to read the letter as though the sculpture could understand it. This will be a unique challenge because I've never written a letter to an object so it will be a new experience. Secondary audiences for this part of the assignment will again be my teacher and classmates, as well as anyone who happens to walk by during my presentation.

The context in which I will be presenting my letter is in the outdoor sculpture garden of the Sheldon Art Gallery, so there will likely be distractions. In order to engage the audience, I will have to do more than simply just read the letter. I will have to use aspects of oral communication to engage the audience and make my letter more effective and interesting. This may include tone, inflection, volume, and pace of speaking, body language and gestures, and facial expressions and enthusiasm for my project.

WP3 Pre-Writing 4

The sculpture I am using for Writing Project 3 is based on a painting by Sandro Botticelli with the same name, "Birth of Venus." The painting shows a woman, the goddess Venus, standing in a shell next to the ocean with angels flying around her. The painting depicts the myth that Venus was born when she emerged from the sea as a grown woman.

This painting draws heavily on Roman mythology. Venus was the Roman goddess of love. She was also associated with beauty and fertility, and is the equivalent of the Greek goddess Aphrodite. She is often shown in art as a beautiful young naked woman with cherubs and doves flying around her, and the Botticelli painting is a prime example of this. Venus is also shown in a similar fashion as the famous sculptures "Venus de Medici" (shown at right) and "Venus de Melo," large marble sculptures of the Greek goddess Aphrodite, made in the first century B.C. All these early examples of Venus show the typical ideal of beauty.

Reuben Nakian, born in 1897 in New York, was the artist that created the sculpture "Birth of Venus," and like Botticelli, a central theme of his is mythology. Many of his works are based on and named after references to mythology, but unlike Botticelli's works, they are not the traditional depiction of the mythological legends. As his "Birth of Venus" shows, Nakian's works are a sharp contrast to the paintings and figures they are referencing. They are "based on the radical abstraction of the female form as a way to transcend mere appearance to address more primal, essential issues." (http://rogallery.com/Nakian_Reuben/nakian-biography.htm) They are drastically different that the "normal" perceptions of women and beauty, but doing this undermines the perfection of the ancient goddesses. The abstraction draws attention to and normalizes human flaws, showing that not everyone is flawless and perfect.

Wp3 Pre-Writing 3

The sculpture "Birth of Venus" has a lot of interesting characteristics that employ rhetorical concepts and appeals within the art object. The sculpture is a very complex and intriguing piece with a lot going on visually, and as a result, the audience has to think about it more in order to really understand it.

One concept that is important in this sculpture is perspective. This affects the audience in that the structure of the sculpture provides an appeal to pathos. Because of the complicated structure of "Birth of Venus" and the many pieces that make up the sculpture, the audience can see it differently from varying angles. Since it is a three-dimensional piece of art, it looks different depending on where the audience is looking at it from. Certain parts are only visible from certain points, and as the viewer moves around the sculpture, different things come into view. This is important if one is to really take in and try to understand the sculpture as a whole. How the audience perceives the sculpture might affect how they see and understand it.

Another appeal is that the form of the sculpture itself evokes pathos within the audience. It is not the perfect image of beauty, as the Roman goddess Venus is depicted in the painting "Birth of Venus." Instead, the sculpture is imperfect and grotesque. Its flaws are magnified and very obvious to anyone who looks at the art, and that creates an emotional appeal with the audience because people, like the sculpture, are far from perfect. The Venus depicted in the painting is not realistic at all, so the sculpture provides a stronger connection with the audience because it is a more realistic demonstration of life, and it is something the audience can better relate to. Because the audience can relate to this piece of art, they may be more likely to appreciate it and enjoy it.